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PostPosted: Sun Apr 08, 2018 2:53 pm 
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Jutsu List: Mystical Calm Technique
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[b]Name:[/b]
[b]Rank:[/b] (E-S)
[b]Range:[/b] (meters)
[i]Type:[/i] (Ninjutsu, Genjutsu, Fuuinjutsu, Taijutsu, Shurikenjutsu, Kenjutsu, Kugutsu, Kinjutsu)
[i]Sub-type:[/i] (Supplementary, Summoning, Offensive, Defensive)
[b]Elemental Affinity:[/b] (If None list N/A)
[b]Notation:[/b] (Clan, Bloodline, Secret Technique?)
[b]Handsigns:[/b] (What hand signs, if it requires none, drawbacks must include a charge time)
[b]Lore/Flavor:[/b] (Describe the lore/flavor here. Anything about *why* your technique works the way it does, then place the actual mechanics down in Description)
[b]Description:[/b] (Describe the casting process. Not all Ninjutsu require handseals if its basic chakra manipulation.  Jutsu can involve weapons, specific items, etc. Also describe what it looks like, and what it does)
[b]Drawbacks:[/b] (List all drawbacks)

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~`|• Basic Information •|`~
Origin:
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Rank:
D ~ Genin
Class:
Priest
Role:
Supportive
Fighting Styles:
Ijutsu Specialist, Ninjutsu Major
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~`|• Statistical Information •|`~
Strength: Poor
[w/ Major Disadvantage; Flaw]
Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
[w/ Minor Advantage; Ninjutsu Major]
[w/ Major Advantage; Ijutsu Specialty]
Wisdom: Average
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 09, 2018 2:47 pm 
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Jutsu List: Mystical Calm Technique

Emotions of the Winter Sea | 海 初雪 情 | Bankan Koukai Hatsyuki
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Kekkei Genkai
Sub-type: Defensive, Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Clan; Hozuki Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: Known as a purification technique of the Ancients for the Hozuki Clan. The Emotions of the Sea bestows a flushing of the Hozuki's body, keeping them crisp, fresh and alkaline.
Description: Whenever the Hozuki cast a technique, they will flush with a three meter puddle underneath thier feet, letting out a small wave of water, knocking back all whom are in the vicinity, bathing the field in torrential aqua.
Drawbacks:~

Ambiance of the Ocean | 海洋雰囲気 | Khaiyuo O'Shien
Rank: E
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki were known to be passifist in most countries for thier massive manuevering of the tides of the seas. They are known for turning back tides of the waves and halting tsunamis, saving countries from destructions of the floods.
Description: With this technique, the Hozuki can manuever the vibrations of a body of water, stabilizing the suiton element to become passive and soothing; akin when they are in contact with the aquatic element, the pools will not create: vibrations, sounds or signs of movement while they travel upon or underwater. Also, while the Hozuki stand within a pool of water, mist, rain, or sleet, Suiton jutsu recieves a rank increase with a 50 percent reduction of chakra consumption.
Drawbacks: ~

Artic Archetype | 北極圏 元型 | Byakuya Chikiku
Rank: E
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Bloodline
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: A feat of the Kazahana Kekkei Genkai. The Kazahana are known to be entities of the ice, snow, sleet, rain, and mist, thus they have evolved in such geographical terrains where they have an innate advantage. Such fearsome prowness in such terrain has gifted a reknown of 'Those of the Icylyn' or 'Flakes of the Blizzard', or the 'Aetherics of the Snow'

Description: Those of the Artic Archetype naturally are intergrated with the extreme cold temperatures of the tundra and artic terrains, therefore thier bodily physiology holds immunity to the cold they emit and the weather which is akin. The Artic Archetype releases a dense mist while they are in a pool of water, mist, rain, snow, hail, or sleet. The Kazahana incessantly let's off a dense fog around thier bodies, being extremely cold. When they move, the fog travels along a meter behind them and leaves ice trails amongst thier feet. The Kazahana naturally recieve a Major advantage to Reflexes and a Minor Advantage to coordination reflexes, when they are celerically gracing upon icy and wet terrains. Thier wristerns and hands, otherwise, thier thighs, calves, knees, anhklettes and feet, sheen a solid white color, applicable to the snow of which they travel upon. Innately, the Kazahana stratuses lightly, therefore foot prints do not exist underneath thier tender stoccato steps, for they travel on the zenith of the snow.
Drawbacks: ~

Needles of Ice | 氷 鍼 | Hi Khari
Rank: D
Range: Close - Medium [5m - 25m]
Type: Ijutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai
Handsigns: Serpent | Mi
Lore/Flavor: The senbon of ice technique abridges from the origin of the Kazahana lineage, when the clan were the acupuncturist of the daimyous of the country of water. Aesthethically, from metal pin points, the clan created the senbon of ice to numb the pressure of the senbon and to alleviate the pain of muscles and tendons. Other wise, the senbon were easier to stealth in assassinations due to the melting of the ice or easier for healing, by purifying the water once it reached the stream of the blood of the puncturee.
Description:After slight gathering of chakra and the utilization of the nature combination of Suiton with Fuuton, the caster streams the energy into the crevices of thier fingers. Afterwards, six senbon instantly form, per hand, being six inches in length, yet a ten millimeters in width. Inside, they are hollow, filled with water, yet can be hardened, based on the users will. These can be utilized for a variety of purposes, such as acupuncture, or flicked in a direction for an offensive attack, or the basis of other jutsu of the Kazahana lineage.
Drawbacks: (List all drawbacks)

Yi Zhi Jingang Fa | 指金刚法 | One Method ~ Diamond Palm
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Taijutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor:Before artisans and healers for the daimyous, they were gatekeepers of the diamond caves, within the rough of the tundra. In those caves, it was foretold that the Kazahana learned the secrets of the crystals, emanating it's hardness and sheen, to reflect that of thier snow and ice techniques.
Description:

The method of "Diamond Palm" is a hard exercise that strengthens the external components. It belongs to the hard force of Yang. When the exercise attains its aim, it is possible to knock a hole in the chest with few fingers and injure the internal organs. However the "Diamond Palm" evolves the whole hand, both hands and feet, for proper utilization. Evolutionarily for the Kazahana, Chï saught, this technique thus mastering this exercise. Other objects may be used as well. If one strikes at a solid object, it's will leave an indention. A strike against wood would hollow it out: Against iceblocks akin stone are broken into pieces. The Kazahana's hands and feet are extremely resilient, even with a soft texture, the coutours of thier fingers, palms, hands, and wristerns are hard akin sheets of metal. Hyouton chakra can be utilized to cloak thier hands or feet further into fortification so they are sheening a luminous, yet translucent seafoam cerulean and lilac. This special coating streams a trail of glacial mist when the technique is protecting the seams of the hand, forearm or foot, calf. Naturally this hardens gifts a Minor Advantage in reflex, coordination and constitution, for attacking or parrying attacks.

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~`|• Basic Information •|`~
Origin:
Shinobi
Rank:
D ~ Genin
Class:
Priest
Role:
Supportive
Fighting Styles:
Ijutsu Specialist, Ninjutsu Major
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~`|• Statistical Information •|`~
Strength: Poor
[w/ Major Disadvantage; Flaw]
Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
[w/ Minor Advantage; Ninjutsu Major]
[w/ Major Advantage; Ijutsu Specialty]
Wisdom: Average
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 09, 2018 3:27 pm 
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Alkaline of the Aqua:

Nowhere is it listed that Hozuki can cleanse or purify water. Also, this is basically an antidote for literally any poison which is something that falls under Chemistry as I believe Delicate Illness Extraction would be the Ijutsu version. On top of that, a stamina buff and it's considered E-Rank? And it's a sensory rip off? This is denied until heavily reworked.

Emotions of the Winter Sea:

Not as an E-Rank, maybe if it cost a D/C-Rank on top of the technique. Also, "knocking back all whom are in the vicinity" I have a hard time believing someone with poor strength would be knocked back the same with someone with godlike. Additionally, couldn't they just waterwalk on top of it?

Ambiance of the Ocean:

This is literally just Hiding in Water but with a random way too strong buff thrown on. Denied.

Arctic Archetype:

The bonus to Ice Techs would not stack with the Ninjutsu FS nor do I see why this gives a bonus anyway, additionally, the fog stuff doesn't make sense, the boosts require this to at least be a C-Rank but Impetere isn't a stat but some Latin word so I'm not sure what you meant with that. No footsteps is also some like, Silent Killing stuff so that would have to go.

Eyes of the Snowflake:

Neither Hozuki nor Kazehana are Dojutsu clans. Eye stuff isn't their thing. Denied.

Frigidity:

This is just Ice Release: Ice Rock Dome of Magnificent Nothingness with Sharingan's Demonic Illusion: Mirror Heaven and Earth Change thrown in. Denied.

Chill:

C-Rank with 3 tiers of debuffs? Denied.

Frost:

Same as Chill. Denied.

Diamond Finger:

One, this sounds very similar to Lightning Hell Stab and it's versions. Two, what is a "boost in coordination and constitution"? Three, how would boosting either of those allow you to punch holes in things with your fingers?

Needles of Ice:

I don't understand how a D-Rank tech can go through any Wind tech, that seems both strange and entirely untrue.

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Kyujutsu Specialist
Fuuinjutsu Specialist
Sensory Specialist

Strength: Proficient w/Minor (Epic w/Kyujutsu)
Constitution: Proficient
Stamina: Masterful
Reflexes: Masterful (Major Advantage w/Sensory)
Coordination: Masterful (Major Advantage w/Kyujutsu, Major Advantage w/Ninjutsu, Major Advantage w/Sensory, Epic w/Drawing)
Wisdom: Masterful (Epic w/Fuinjutsu)


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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2018 5:42 am 
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Alkaline of the Aqua:

Nowhere is it listed that Hozuki can cleanse or purify water. Also, this is basically an antidote for literally any poison which is something that falls under Chemistry as I believe Delicate Illness Extraction would be the Ijutsu version. On top of that, a stamina buff and it's considered E-Rank? And it's a sensory rip off? This is denied until heavily reworked.
I am willing to comradeering so we can get this techniques restored and properly accepted. I comprehend the clan's lineage, however this technique is a viable way of my character combining her medical ability, which will be her speciality, with her innate clan abilities, allowing her to disinfect and sonar water. Kinda like a clerics holy water. And the study of Toxicology is needed in order to study poisons and venoms as well as prevention and creating vaccines.

What I noticed of the Delicate Illness Extraction is that there has to be an incision which requires to be made before extraction, and even then, it causes excruciating pain to tbe recipient. My jutsu is virtually harmless, and indeed intends to heal. Similarly, they do have to intake the alkaline by indigestion the salve, however the route of extraction is totally different from the DIET.

I can totally increase the rank of the jutsu to B Rsnk, or make separate C ranks ones for the effect: Heals/Cleanse~ Sonar.
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Emotions of the Sea:

Not as an E-Rank, maybe if it cost a D/C-Rank on top of the technique. Also, "knocking back all whom are in the vicinity" I have a hard time believing someone with poor strength would be knocked back the same with someone with godlike. Additionally, couldn't they just waterwalk on top of it?
I can allocate the D rank upkeep. And the technique wouldn't be gauged by strength, since it isn't physical, although by ninjutsu specialty and the advantages gifted. Of course, one innately knows that those of a higher level will volley such jutsu, and would be merely uneffected. And yes, they could walk on it if they can ride the wave.
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Arctic Archetype:

The bonus to Ice Techs would not stack with the Ninjutsu FS nor do I see why this gives a bonus anyway, additionally, the fog stuff doesn't make sense, the boosts require this to at least be a C-Rank but Impetere isn't a stat but some Latin word so I'm not sure what you meant with that. No footsteps is also some like, Silent Killing stuff so that would have to go.
I can increase the rank towards C and I can remove the footsteps stealth. And I am beginning to comprehend based on how ninjutsu stacking works, so I shall remove that bit. The fog is purely aesthetic. I'll remove the impetere, yet I am seeking the boost when within those terrains.
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Diamond Finger:

One, this sounds very similar to Lightning Hell Stab and it's versions. Two, what is a "boost in coordination and constitution"? Three, how would boosting either of those allow you to punch holes in things with your fingers?
The attributes of coordination and constitution. The Kazahana has practice such art for generations and aeons, practicing the style and reinforcing the habit of breaking through dense and even bigger harder foundations. Such is innate as anyone whom would know Taijutsu Or Kenjutsu. The repetition gifted them inquiry that allowed them to suppliment the reinforcement of their hands, to lessen damage yet tanking the force.

I can comprehend where you are coming from though. Since the Lightening Hell Stab and other variants are based on Agility and speed. If the hands are cold enough, they may receive a cool shoulder, a hard elbow, and a tsuplex or throw.
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Needles of Ice:

I don't understand how a D-Rank tech can go through any Wind tech, that seems both strange and entirely untrue.
Well, I can probably remove that.

Over all I've altered most of the jutsu, if there is anything else, please, let me know. Thank you~

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~`|• Basic Information •|`~
Origin:
Shinobi
Rank:
D ~ Genin
Class:
Priest
Role:
Supportive
Fighting Styles:
Ijutsu Specialist, Ninjutsu Major
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~`|• Statistical Information •|`~
Strength: Poor
[w/ Major Disadvantage; Flaw]
Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
[w/ Minor Advantage; Ninjutsu Major]
[w/ Major Advantage; Ijutsu Specialty]
Wisdom: Average
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Alkaline of the Aqua:

Without the sensory FS you can not create sensory customs, so the sonar portion of this tech would not be something your char would have the knowledge of and would need to go entirely. The reason I stated both Chemistry and Delicate Illness is that this technique circumvents both. You cleanse any toxin or virus by just having them drink water. Just upping this to B-Rank isn't a rework, which is what I believe this tech needs as a whole.

Emotions of the Sea:

It's not a matter of being physical regarding if it pushes someone or not. A wave still pushes someone if they don't have the strength to hold themselves up against it. As this creates a workable pool of water I would say it would have a C-Rank Cost personally. Not an upkeep either but a per tech used kind of thing. Otherwise doing eight techniques in one post creates 24m of water for a D-Rank and that's uh, not okay.

Arctic Archetype:

A C-Rank tech can give 3 advantages so if you want to change one of those to Major or add a Minor to a third stat you can choose to do so.

Diamond Finger:

Well it's not a matter of how they practice it, but how it mechanically would work. I find it not only hard to believe but probably impossible that someone with Poor Strength would punch holes in things with their fingers. I was asking for a set number of Advantages to the stats, not just what boosting the stats means. I do not believe that Constitution would aid you in stabbing holes in things and seems to be a random stat boost dissociated with what the tech itself does.

Needles of Ice:

Putting a set speed on projectiles is something we don't like to do, so saying the needles move at your Reflexes is a no go however just making senbon and throwing them is fine.

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Ninjutsu Specialist (Wind)
Kyujutsu Specialist
Fuuinjutsu Specialist
Sensory Specialist

Strength: Proficient w/Minor (Epic w/Kyujutsu)
Constitution: Proficient
Stamina: Masterful
Reflexes: Masterful (Major Advantage w/Sensory)
Coordination: Masterful (Major Advantage w/Kyujutsu, Major Advantage w/Ninjutsu, Major Advantage w/Sensory, Epic w/Drawing)
Wisdom: Masterful (Epic w/Fuinjutsu)


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Thanks. Makes sense. ^__^v
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Alkaline of the Aqua:

Without the sensory FS you can not create sensory customs, so the sonar portion of this tech would not be something your char would have the knowledge of and would need to go entirely. The reason I stated both Chemistry and Delicate Illness is that this technique circumvents both. You cleanse any toxin or virus by just having them drink water. Just upping this to B-Rank isn't a rework, which is what I believe this tech needs as a whole.
Isee. If one had sensory, would I be able to utilize this jutsu as a route of detection, based on my characters abilities? Even, the jutsu is designed to purify and cleanse a system according to curation. It extracts all the same; I through an orifice or induction. What would be a suitable level for the suiton Ijutsu? I am fine with reworking the jutsu, just wondering what I need to do.
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Emotions of the Sea:

It's not a matter of being physical regarding if it pushes someone or not. A wave still pushes someone if they don't have the strength to hold themselves up against it. As this creates a workable pool of water I would say it would have a C-Rank Cost personally. Not an upkeep either but a per tech used kind of thing. Otherwise doing eight techniques in one post creates 24m of water for a D-Rank and that's uh, not okay.
True. Thanks I appreciate that one.
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Arctic Archetype:

A C-Rank tech can give 3 advantages so if you want to change one of those to Major or add a Minor to a third stat you can choose to do so.
Altered.
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Diamond Finger:

Well it's not a matter of how they practice it, but how it mechanically would work. I find it not only hard to believe but probably impossible that someone with Poor Strength would punch holes in things with their fingers. I was asking for a set number of Advantages to the stats, not just what boosting the stats means. I do not believe that Constitution would aid you in stabbing holes in things and seems to be a random stat boost dissociated with what the tech itself does.
Would it be Constitution and Reflexes? I guess both of those would be needed it makes some for of piercing action. The reflexes to throw it fast and the constitution to make it last. I made a small adjustment for the boostin' for a Minr Adv.
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Needles of Ice:

Putting a set speed on projectiles is something we don't like to do, so saying the needles move at your Reflexes is a no go however just making senbon and throwing them is fine.
Comprehensible.
Thanks again~

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~`|• Basic Information •|`~
Origin:
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Rank:
D ~ Genin
Class:
Priest
Role:
Supportive
Fighting Styles:
Ijutsu Specialist, Ninjutsu Major
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~`|• Statistical Information •|`~
Strength: Poor
[w/ Major Disadvantage; Flaw]
Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
[w/ Minor Advantage; Ninjutsu Major]
[w/ Major Advantage; Ijutsu Specialty]
Wisdom: Average
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Helicopter Shot | 空撮 | Kuusatsu
Rank: C
Range: Personal - Close [0m - 25m]
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub-type: Offensive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton | Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: -
Handsigns: Sheep > Tiger > Dog | Hitsuji > Tora > Inu
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki are known for thier ample prowness of Suiton jutsu, being thier physiology is purely made of the Aquatic element, thus The Hozuki find it quite easy to utilize this signiture jutsu for thier ranged style ninjutsu.
Description: The user kneads chakra within their mouth or finger tips then propels it forth in the form of condensed volleys of water. While this is a water release technique, it can still be employed someplace where no water is available.

After gathering the appropiate amount of chakra, complimentary to the amount of water they utilize for this technique, the user shoots a high-speed volley from thier fingers, hand or mouth. Each volley is the size of a softball containing ten shots, for utilization of each one of it's variants; a softball or ten individual pellet shots. The smaller condensed bobbules of aqua are high velocity shots, spinning in spherical circumvent, has enough velocity to pierce light armor and barriers, while damaging weapons. The larger softball variation has the same velocity, yet a bludgeoning effect, designed for knocking down structures and indentions or minor lacerations. Alternatively, the user can stream forth a concussive beam of water, a meter diameter, under the same effects as the soft ball variant. The speed of the technique is on par to proficient reflexes.
Drawbacks:~

Torrential Wedding | 豪雨 輿 | Shottogan Uxedingu
Rank: B
Range: Personal - Medium [0m - 100m]
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub-type: Offensive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton | Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: -
Handsigns: Tiger > Dog > Dragon | Tora > Inu > Ryu
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki are known for thier ample prowness of Suiton jutsu, being thier physiology is purely made of the Aquatic element, thus The Hozuki find it quite easy to utilize this signiture jutsu for thier ranged style ninjutsu.
Description: The user kneads chakra within their mouth or finger tips then propels it forth in the form of condensed volleys of water. While this is a water release technique, it can still be employed someplace where no water is available.

After gathering the appropiate amount of chakra, complimentary to the amount of water they utilize for this technique, the user shoots five high-speed vollies from thier fingers, hand or mouth. Each volley is the size of a golfball containing ten shots, for utilization of each one of it's variants; a softball or ten individual pellet shots. The smaller condensed bobbules of aqua are high velocity shots, spinning in spherical circumvent, has enough velocity to pierce heavy armor and barriers, while sundering weapons. The larger golfball variation has the same velocity, yet a bludgeoning effect, designed for knocking down structures and indentions or minor lacerations, splashing then exploding. Alternatively, the user can stream forth a concussive beam of water, 5 meters diameter, under the same effects aes the golfball variant.
Drawbacks: Upon entering the 75 meter mark, the scatter shots are are prone fizzle out, thus the rate and pressure of explosion dissipates and retains properties of the latter jutsu: Water Release - Kuutatsu




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~`|• Basic Information •|`~
Origin:
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Rank:
D ~ Genin
Class:
Priest
Role:
Supportive
Fighting Styles:
Ijutsu Specialist, Ninjutsu Major
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~`|• Statistical Information •|`~
Strength: Poor
[w/ Major Disadvantage; Flaw]
Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
[w/ Minor Advantage; Ninjutsu Major]
[w/ Major Advantage; Ijutsu Specialty]
Wisdom: Average
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For the first set, could you make a new post with the changes and excluding the ones that are denied please? It is very hard to discern your formatting when there's so much written in one post.
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Helicopter Shot | 空撮 | Kuusatsu
Rank: C
Range: Personal - Close [0m - 25m]
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub-type: Offensive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton | Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: -
Handsigns: Sheep > Tiger > Dog | Hitsuji > Tora > Inu
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki are known for thier ample prowness of Suiton jutsu, being thier physiology is purely made of the Aquatic element, thus The Hozuki find it quite easy to utilize this signiture jutsu for thier ranged style ninjutsu.
Description: The user kneads chakra within their mouth or finger tips then propels it forth in the form of condensed volleys of water. While this is a water release technique, it can still be employed someplace where no water is available.

After gathering the appropiate amount of chakra, complimentary to the amount of water they utilize for this technique, the user shoots a high-speed volley from thier fingers, hand or mouth. Each volley is the size of a softball containing ten shots, for utilization of each one of it's variants; a softball or ten individual pellet shots. The smaller condensed bobbules of aqua are high velocity shots, spinning in spherical circumvent, has enough velocity to pierce light armor and barriers, while damaging weapons. The larger softball variation has the same velocity, yet a bludgeoning effect, designed for knocking down structures and indentions or minor lacerations. Alternatively, the user can stream forth a concussive beam of water, a meter diameter, under the same effects as the soft ball variant. The speed of the technique is on par to proficient reflexes.
Drawbacks:~

Torrential Wedding | 豪雨 輿 | Shottogan Uxedingu
Rank: B
Range: Personal - Medium [0m - 100m]
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub-type: Offensive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton | Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: -
Handsigns: Tiger > Dog > Dragon | Tora > Inu > Ryu
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki are known for thier ample prowness of Suiton jutsu, being thier physiology is purely made of the Aquatic element, thus The Hozuki find it quite easy to utilize this signiture jutsu for thier ranged style ninjutsu.
Description: The user kneads chakra within their mouth or finger tips then propels it forth in the form of condensed volleys of water. While this is a water release technique, it can still be employed someplace where no water is available.

After gathering the appropiate amount of chakra, complimentary to the amount of water they utilize for this technique, the user shoots five high-speed vollies from thier fingers, hand or mouth. Each volley is the size of a golfball containing ten shots, for utilization of each one of it's variants; a softball or ten individual pellet shots. The smaller condensed bobbules of aqua are high velocity shots, spinning in spherical circumvent, has enough velocity to pierce heavy armor and barriers, while sundering weapons. The larger golfball variation has the same velocity, yet a bludgeoning effect, designed for knocking down structures and indentions or minor lacerations, splashing then exploding. Alternatively, the user can stream forth a concussive beam of water, 5 meters diameter, under the same effects aes the golfball variant.
Drawbacks: Upon entering the 75 meter mark, the scatter shots are are prone fizzle out, thus the rate and pressure of explosion dissipates and retains properties of the latter jutsu: Water Release - Kuutatsu
Helicopter Shot:

As long as it's understood that it's fingers, hand, or mouth, meaning one volley at a time, approved.

Torrential Wedding:

A one Rank increase upped this from 10 shots to 50 and that's way too much. I'm fine with two volleys of 10 or making it an A-Rank to maintain the 50 shots. Also the drawback just makes it turn into another technique and isn't really a drawback, remove that part please.

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Strength: Proficient w/Minor (Epic w/Kyujutsu)
Constitution: Proficient
Stamina: Masterful
Reflexes: Masterful (Major Advantage w/Sensory)
Coordination: Masterful (Major Advantage w/Kyujutsu, Major Advantage w/Ninjutsu, Major Advantage w/Sensory, Epic w/Drawing)
Wisdom: Masterful (Epic w/Fuinjutsu)


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Alkaline of the Aqua | 滷水道 | ~ Akhuriosi
Rank: E
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Ijutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Clan; Hozuki Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: Known as a detoxification technique of the elders for the Hozuki Clan, which was gifted by thier deities of their pantheon to help find those whom were taint and whilst alleviating the sickness of others.
Description: The Hozuki have the ability to naturally cleanse any water source they come into contact with. By applying chakra to a pool of water, they naturally disinfect and extract any forms of virus, disease, and poisons from the basin. The harmful substance is then stored in a ball of fluid, which the Hozuki can purify into alkaline water. When gifting the Alkaline of the Aqua to others for indigestion, they are also purged of any forms of virus, disease, and poisons and regurgitate the harmful substance in a ball of fluid, while replenishing stamina from fatigue by advantages depending on the amount water purified.

This also can be utilized as a form of long range detection in seasons which are damp, moist, wet, and raining. By tapping into the surface of the aqua, they are able to detect within the streams of the seams, akin sonae. Naturally, the Hozuki utilizes this technique to heal and to know what is within the basins of water.

E~ 0m - 5m Personal~ Minor Advantage
D~ 5m - 25m Close~ Minor Advantage
C~ 50m - 100m Medium~ Minor Advantage
B~ 100m - 500m Far~ Tier Advantage
A~ 500 - 5km Orbic~ Minor Tier Advantage
S~ 5km - 25km Aeonic~ Dual Tier Advantage

Drawbacks:~

Emotions of the Winter Sea | 海 初雪 情 | Bankan Koukai Hatsyuki
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Kekkei Genkai
Sub-type: Defensive, Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Clan; Hozuki Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: Known as a purification technique of the Ancients for the Hozuki Clan. The Emotions of the Sea bestows a flushing of the Hozuki's body, keeping them crisp, fresh and alkaline.
Description: Whenever the Hozuki cast a technique, they will flush with a three meter puddle underneath thier feet, letting out a small wave of water, knocking back all whom are in the vicinity, bathing the field in torrential aqua.
Drawbacks:~

Ambiance of the Ocean | 海洋雰囲気 | Khaiyuo O'Shien
Rank: E
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki were known to be passifist in most countries for thier massive manuevering of the tides of the seas. They are known for turning back tides of the waves and halting tsunamis, saving countries from destructions of the floods. Other than, while within thier natural element, they become powerhouses of the Suiton and Hyouton source.
Description: While the Hozuki stand within a pool of water, mist, rain, snow, or sleet, Suiton jutsu recieves a rank increase with a 50 percent reduction of chakra consumption.
Drawbacks: ~

Artic Archetype | 北極圏 元型 | Byakuya Chikiku
Rank: E
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Bloodline
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: A feat of the Kazahana Kekkei Genkai. The Kazahana are known to be entities of the ice, snow, sleet, rain, and mist, thus they have evolved in such geographical terrains where they have an innate advantage. Such fearsome prowness in such terrain has gifted a reknown of 'Those of the Icylyn' or 'Flakes of the Blizzard', or the 'Aetherics of the Snow'

Description: Those of the Artic Archetype naturally are intergrated with the extreme cold temperatures of the tundra and artic terrains, therefore thier bodily physiology holds immunity to the cold they emit and the weather which is akin. The Artic Archetype releases a dense mist while they are in a pool of water, mist, rain, snow, hail, or sleet. The Kazahana incessantly let's off a dense fog around thier bodies, being extremely cold. When they move, the fog travels along a meter behind them and leaves ice trails amongst thier feet. The Kazahana naturally recieve a Major advantage to Reflexes and a Minor Advantage to coordination, when they are celerically gracing upon icy and wet terrains. Thier wristerns and hands, otherwise, thier thighs, calves, knees, anhklettes and feet, sheen a solid white color, applicable to the snow of which they travel upon. Innately, the Kazahana stratuses lightly, therefore foot prints do not exist underneath thier tender stoccato steps, for they travel on the zenith of the snow.
Drawbacks: ~

Needles of Ice | 氷 鍼 | Hi Khari
Rank: D
Range: Close - Medium [5m - 25m]
Type: Ijutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai
Handsigns: Serpent | Mi
Lore/Flavor: The senbon of ice technique abridges from the origin of the Kazahana lineage, when the clan were the acupuncturist of the daimyous of the country of water. Aesthethically, from metal pin points, the clan created the senbon of ice to numb the pressure of the senbon and to alleviate the pain of muscles and tendons. Other wise, the senbon were easier to stealth in assassinations due to the melting of the ice or easier for healing, by purifying the water once it reached the stream of the blood of the puncturee.
Description:After slight gathering of chakra and the utilization of the nature combination of Suiton with Fuuton, the caster streams the energy into the crevices of thier fingers. Afterwards, six senbon instantly form, per hand, being six inches in length, yet a ten millimeters in width. Inside, they are hollow, filled with water, yet can be hardened, based on the users will. These can be utilized for a variety of purposes, such as acupuncture, or flicked in a direction for an offensive attack, or the basis of other jutsu of the Kazahana lineage.
Drawbacks: (List all drawbacks)

Yi Zhi Jingang Fa | 指金刚法 | One Method ~ Diamond Palm
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Taijutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor:Before artisans and healers for the daimyous, they were gatekeepers of the diamond caves, within the rough of the tundra. In those caves, it was foretold that the Kazahana learned the secrets of the crystals, emanating it's hardness and sheen, to reflect that of thier snow and ice techniques.
Description:

The method of "Diamond Palm" is a hard exercise that strengthens the external components. It belongs to the hard force of Yang. When the exercise attains its aim, it is possible to knock a hole in the chest with few fingers and injure the internal organs. However the "Diamond Palm" evolves the whole hand, both hands and feet, for proper utilization. Evolutionarily for the Kazahana, Chï saught, this technique thus mastering this exercise. Other objects may be used as well. If one strikes at a solid object, it's will leave an indention. A strike against wood would hollow it out: Against iceblocks akin stone are broken into pieces. The Kazahana's hands and feet are extremely resilient, even with a soft texture, the coutours of thier fingers, palms, hands, and wristerns are hard akin sheets of metal. Hyouton chakra can be utilized to cloak thier hands or feet further into fortification so they are sheening a luminous, yet translucent seafoam cerulean and lilac. This special coating streams a trail of glacial mist when the technique is protecting the seams of the hand, forearm or foot, calf. Naturally this hardens gifts a Minor Advantage in reflex, coordination and constitution, for attacking or parrying attacks.
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Helicopter Shot | 空撮 | Kuusatsu
Rank: C
Range: Personal - Close [0m - 25m]
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub-type: Offensive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton | Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: -
Handsigns: Sheep > Tiger > Dog | Hitsuji > Tora > Inu
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki are known for thier ample prowness of Suiton jutsu, being thier physiology is purely made of the Aquatic element, thus The Hozuki find it quite easy to utilize this signiture jutsu for thier ranged style ninjutsu.
Description: The user kneads chakra within their mouth or finger tips then propels it forth in the form of condensed volleys of water. While this is a water release technique, it can still be employed someplace where no water is available.

After gathering the appropiate amount of chakra, complimentary to the amount of water they utilize for this technique, the user shoots a high-speed volley from thier fingers, hand or mouth. Each volley is the size of a softball containing ten shots, for utilization of each one of it's variants; a softball or ten individual pellet shots. The smaller condensed bobbules of aqua are high velocity shots, spinning in spherical circumvent, has enough velocity to pierce light armor and barriers, while damaging weapons. The larger softball variation has the same velocity, yet a bludgeoning effect, designed for knocking down structures and indentions or minor lacerations. Alternatively, the user can stream forth a concussive beam of water, a meter diameter, under the same effects as the soft ball variant.

Torrential Wedding | 豪雨 輿 | Shottogan Uxedingu
Rank: A
Range: Personal - Medium [0m - 100m]
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub-type: Offensive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton | Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: -
Handsigns: Tiger > Dog > Dragon | Tora > Inu > Ryu
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki are known for thier ample prowness of Suiton jutsu, being thier physiology is purely made of the Aquatic element, thus The Hozuki find it quite easy to utilize this signiture jutsu for thier ranged style ninjutsu.
Description: The user kneads chakra within their mouth or finger tips then propels it forth in the form of condensed volleys of water. While this is a water release technique, it can still be employed someplace where no water is available.

After gathering the appropiate amount of chakra, complimentary to the amount of water they utilize for this technique, the user shoots five high-speed vollies from thier fingers, hand or mouth. Each volley is the size of a golfball containing ten shots, for utilization of each one of it's variants; a softball or fifty individual pellet shots. The smaller condensed bobbules of aqua are high velocity shots, spinning in spherical circumvent, has enough velocity to pierce heavy armor and barriers, while sundering weapons. The larger golfball variation has the same velocity, yet a bludgeoning effect, designed for knocking down structures and indentions or minor lacerations, splashing then exploding. Alternatively, the user can stream forth a concussive beam of water, 5 meters diameter, under the same effects as the golfball variant.
Drawbacks: ~

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Rank:
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Role:
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Strength: Poor
[w/ Major Disadvantage; Flaw]
Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
[w/ Minor Advantage; Ninjutsu Major]
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Wisdom: Average
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Role:
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Fighting Styles:
Ijutsu Specialist, Ninjutsu Major
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Strength: Poor
[w/ Major Disadvantage; Flaw]
Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
[w/ Minor Advantage; Ninjutsu Major]
[w/ Major Advantage; Ijutsu Specialty]
Wisdom: Average
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Hi! So, a couple things:
Quote:
Alkaline of the Aqua | 滷水道 | ~ Akhuriosi
Rank: E
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Ijutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Clan; Hozuki Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: Known as a detoxification technique of the elders for the Hozuki Clan, which was gifted by thier deities of their pantheon to help find those whom were taint and whilst alleviating the sickness of others.
Description: The Hozuki have the ability to naturally cleanse any water source they come into contact with. By applying chakra to a pool of water, they naturally disinfect and extract any forms of virus, disease, and poisons from the basin. The harmful substance is then stored in a ball of fluid, which the Hozuki can purify into alkaline water. When gifting the Alkaline of the Aqua to others for indigestion, they are also purged of any forms of virus, disease, and poisons and regurgitate the harmful substance in a ball of fluid, while replenishing stamina from fatigue by advantages depending on the amount water purified.

This also can be utilized as a form of long range detection in seasons which are damp, moist, wet, and raining. By tapping into the surface of the aqua, they are able to detect within the streams of the seams, akin sonae. Naturally, the Hozuki utilizes this technique to heal and to know what is within the basins of water.

E~ 0m - 5m Personal~ Minor Advantage
D~ 5m - 25m Close~ Minor Advantage
C~ 50m - 100m Medium~ Minor Advantage
B~ 100m - 500m Far~ Tier Advantage
A~ 500 - 5km Orbic~ Minor Tier Advantage
S~ 5km - 25km Aeonic~ Dual Tier Advantage

Drawbacks:~
First and foremost, there still need to be some major changes to this technique overall. Dawn made some good suggestions to you, so there's a starting point. Hard denied until changes are made.
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Emotions of the Winter Sea | 海 初雪 情 | Bankan Koukai Hatsyuki
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Kekkei Genkai
Sub-type: Defensive, Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Clan; Hozuki Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: Known as a purification technique of the Ancients for the Hozuki Clan. The Emotions of the Sea bestows a flushing of the Hozuki's body, keeping them crisp, fresh and alkaline.
Description: Whenever the Hozuki cast a technique, they will flush with a three meter puddle underneath thier feet, letting out a small wave of water, knocking back all whom are in the vicinity, bathing the field in torrential aqua.
Drawbacks:~
I feel that it's a bit overkill to be able to release a knockback wave for every technique used. That'd be like getting a free offensive technique on top of whatever the initial technique was. Plus, you'd still be paying the chakra for it. The way I'm seeing this, would you really want to spend a C-Rank amount of chakra on top of however much the initial technique cost? And also, the knockback should still be addressed. I find it hard to believe this wave would be able to knock anyone in the vicinity. Denied.
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Ambiance of the Ocean | 海洋雰囲気 | Khaiyuo O'Shien
Rank: E
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki were known to be passifist in most countries for thier massive manuevering of the tides of the seas. They are known for turning back tides of the waves and halting tsunamis, saving countries from destructions of the floods.
Description: With this technique, the Hozuki can manuever the vibrations of a body of water, stabilizing the suiton element to become passive and soothing; akin when they are in contact with the aquatic element, the pools will not create: vibrations, sounds or signs of movement while they travel upon or underwater. Also, while the Hozuki stand within a pool of water, mist, rain, or sleet, Suiton jutsu recieves a rank increase with a 50 percent reduction of chakra consumption.
Drawbacks: ~
This was hard denied already, so again: Denied until changes are made.
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Artic Archetype | 北極圏 元型 | Byakuya Chikiku
Rank: E
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Bloodline
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: A feat of the Kazahana Kekkei Genkai. The Kazahana are known to be entities of the ice, snow, sleet, rain, and mist, thus they have evolved in such geographical terrains where they have an innate advantage. Such fearsome prowness in such terrain has gifted a reknown of 'Those of the Icylyn' or 'Flakes of the Blizzard', or the 'Aetherics of the Snow'

Description: Those of the Artic Archetype naturally are intergrated with the extreme cold temperatures of the tundra and artic terrains, therefore thier bodily physiology holds immunity to the cold they emit and the weather which is akin. The Artic Archetype releases a dense mist while they are in a pool of water, mist, rain, snow, hail, or sleet. The Kazahana incessantly let's off a dense fog around thier bodies, being extremely cold. When they move, the fog travels along a meter behind them and leaves ice trails amongst thier feet. The Kazahana naturally recieve a Major advantage to Reflexes and a Minor Advantage to coordination reflexes, when they are celerically gracing upon icy and wet terrains. Thier wristerns and hands, otherwise, thier thighs, calves, knees, anhklettes and feet, sheen a solid white color, applicable to the snow of which they travel upon. Innately, the Kazahana stratuses lightly, therefore foot prints do not exist underneath thier tender stoccato steps, for they travel on the zenith of the snow.
Drawbacks: ~
I'm beginning to notice a trend here. Denied until changes are made.
  • Whether purely aesthetic or not, the fog still grants a tactical advantage.
  • Having no footsteps is akin to Silent Killing and has to go.
  • An E-Rank technique definitely wouldn't have the ability to buff Reflexes/Coordination. Like Dawn, I would also recommend bumping it up to C-Rank.
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    Needles of Ice | 氷 鍼 | Hi Khari
    Rank: D
    Range: Close - Medium [5m - 25m]
    Type: Ijutsu
    Sub-type: Supplementary
    Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
    Notation: Kekkei Genkai
    Handsigns: Serpent | Mi
    Lore/Flavor: The senbon of ice technique abridges from the origin of the Kazahana lineage, when the clan were the acupuncturist of the daimyous of the country of water. Aesthethically, from metal pin points, the clan created the senbon of ice to numb the pressure of the senbon and to alleviate the pain of muscles and tendons. Other wise, the senbon were easier to stealth in assassinations due to the melting of the ice or easier for healing, by purifying the water once it reached the stream of the blood of the puncturee.
    Description:After slight gathering of chakra and the utilization of the nature combination of Suiton with Fuuton, the caster streams the energy into the crevices of thier fingers. Afterwards, six senbon instantly form, per hand, being six inches in length, yet a ten millimeters in width. Inside, they are hollow, filled with water, yet can be hardened, based on the users will. These can be utilized for a variety of purposes, such as acupuncture, or flicked in a direction for an offensive attack, or the basis of other jutsu of the Kazahana lineage.
    Drawbacks: (List all drawbacks)
    So long as no one else has anything further to note, I think this is all good. Approved.
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    Yi Zhi Jingang Fa | 指金刚法 | One Method ~ Diamond Palm
    Rank: C
    Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
    Type: Taijutsu
    Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
    Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
    Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
    Handsigns: -
    Lore/Flavor:Before artisans and healers for the daimyous, they were gatekeepers of the diamond caves, within the rough of the tundra. In those caves, it was foretold that the Kazahana learned the secrets of the crystals, emanating it's hardness and sheen, to reflect that of thier snow and ice techniques.
    Description:

    The method of "Diamond Palm" is a hard exercise that strengthens the external components. It belongs to the hard force of Yang. When the exercise attains its aim, it is possible to knock a hole in the chest with few fingers and injure the internal organs. However the "Diamond Palm" evolves the whole hand, both hands and feet, for proper utilization. Evolutionarily for the Kazahana, Chï saught, this technique thus mastering this exercise. Other objects may be used as well. If one strikes at a solid object, it's will leave an indention. A strike against wood would hollow it out: Against iceblocks akin stone are broken into pieces. The Kazahana's hands and feet are extremely resilient, even with a soft texture, the coutours of thier fingers, palms, hands, and wristerns are hard akin sheets of metal. Hyouton chakra can be utilized to cloak thier hands or feet further into fortification so they are sheening a luminous, yet translucent seafoam cerulean and lilac. This special coating streams a trail of glacial mist when the technique is protecting the seams of the hand, forearm or foot, calf. Naturally this hardens gifts a Minor Advantage in reflex, coordination and constitution, for attacking or parrying attacks.
    I still find this a bit too OP. Constitution stat really has no business being buffed by this, considering it (from my understanding) is set out to be an offensive technique. Offensive techniques probably shouldn't boost Con like that.
    Quote:
    Helicopter Shot | 空撮 | Kuusatsu
    Rank: C
    Range: Personal - Close [0m - 25m]
    Type: Ninjutsu
    Sub-type: Offensive
    Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton | Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
    Notation: -
    Handsigns: Sheep > Tiger > Dog | Hitsuji > Tora > Inu
    Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki are known for thier ample prowness of Suiton jutsu, being thier physiology is purely made of the Aquatic element, thus The Hozuki find it quite easy to utilize this signiture jutsu for thier ranged style ninjutsu.
    Description: The user kneads chakra within their mouth or finger tips then propels it forth in the form of condensed volleys of water. While this is a water release technique, it can still be employed someplace where no water is available.

    After gathering the appropiate amount of chakra, complimentary to the amount of water they utilize for this technique, the user shoots a high-speed volley from thier fingers, hand or mouth. Each volley is the size of a softball containing ten shots, for utilization of each one of it's variants; a softball or ten individual pellet shots. The smaller condensed bobbules of aqua are high velocity shots, spinning in spherical circumvent, has enough velocity to pierce light armor and barriers, while damaging weapons. The larger softball variation has the same velocity, yet a bludgeoning effect, designed for knocking down structures and indentions or minor lacerations. Alternatively, the user can stream forth a concussive beam of water, a meter diameter, under the same effects as the soft ball variant. The speed of the technique is on par to proficient reflexes.
    Drawbacks:~
    As previously stated, it's typically frowned upon to give projectile-based techniques a set speed. Otherwise, approved.
    Quote:
    Torrential Wedding | 豪雨 輿 | Shottogan Uxedingu
    Rank: A
    Range: Personal - Medium [0m - 100m]
    Type: Ninjutsu
    Sub-type: Offensive
    Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton | Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
    Notation: -
    Handsigns: Tiger > Dog > Dragon | Tora > Inu > Ryu
    Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki are known for thier ample prowness of Suiton jutsu, being thier physiology is purely made of the Aquatic element, thus The Hozuki find it quite easy to utilize this signiture jutsu for thier ranged style ninjutsu.
    Description: The user kneads chakra within their mouth or finger tips then propels it forth in the form of condensed volleys of water. While this is a water release technique, it can still be employed someplace where no water is available.

    After gathering the appropiate amount of chakra, complimentary to the amount of water they utilize for this technique, the user shoots five high-speed vollies from thier fingers, hand or mouth. Each volley is the size of a golfball containing ten shots, for utilization of each one of it's variants; a softball or fifty individual pellet shots. The smaller condensed bobbules of aqua are high velocity shots, spinning in spherical circumvent, has enough velocity to pierce heavy armor and barriers, while sundering weapons. The larger golfball variation has the same velocity, yet a bludgeoning effect, designed for knocking down structures and indentions or minor lacerations, splashing then exploding. Alternatively, the user can stream forth a concussive beam of water, 5 meters diameter, under the same effects as the golfball variant.
    Drawbacks: ~
    Again, so long as no one has any objections, approved.

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  • Strength: Masterful (Major Advantage, Ken Spec)
  • Constitution: Average
  • Stamina: Proficient
  • Reflexes: Average (Major Advantage, Ken Spec)
  • Coordination: Proficient (Major Advantage, Ken Spec)
  • Wisdom: Average
  • Tracking: Epic (Major Advantage, Ken Spec)
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I appreciate the acceptance. I'll go through the dialogue and change what requires to be fixed and repost.

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Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 18, 2018 2:59 pm 
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Thanks Jubei. I appreciate it.
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Alkaline of the Aqua

First and foremost, there still need to be some major changes to this technique overall. Dawn made some good suggestions to you, so there's a starting point. Hard denied until changes are made.
I see, just awaiting reply since I changed the jutsu again. Thanks. I'll bring it up again when it's finalized.
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Emotions of the Sea

I feel that it's a bit overkill to be able to release a knockback wave for every technique used. That'd be like getting a free offensive technique on top of whatever the initial technique was. Plus, you'd still be paying the chakra for it. The way I'm seeing this, would you really want to spend a C-Rank amount of chakra on top of however much the initial technique cost? And also, the knockback should still be addressed. I find it hard to believe this wave would be able to knock anyone in the vicinity. Denied.
I don't comprehend 'overkill'. I nerfed the effect by adding an extra C rank cost for a small wave of up to three feet, and not it's maximum range of five. Unless you are saying it's flawed because of every technique, in which I can add based on Suiton and Hyouton, which would help balance the specifications of the type of jutsu required for initiation. Im not really worried on C rank for every jutsu. It's a supplimentation for an extra effect. No different than when someone adds blaze to thier normal katon. It would naturally increase rankage by a small percentile. If C rank is too much, I can totally bring it down to D rank.

And What influences knockback and how another negates by being overpowered? So for instance if a wind jutsu or a strong enough lightning jutsu, based on the user level? Or Fighting Style? Or Stats?
There is not clear definition of pwr lvl, other than rank of shinobi and jutsu. an comprehend if they had a major advantage in which they are immune or where as a minor would half range of knockback. Then again, if they are on par, knockback and even less, doubles range.
Quote:
Ambiance of the Ocean

This was hard denied already, so again: Denied until changes are made.
I altered the jutsu for just the rank increase and reduction of chakra.
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I'm beginning to notice a trend here. Denied until changes are made.
  • Whether purely aesthetic or not, the fog still grants a tactical advantage.
  • Having no footsteps is akin to Silent Killing and has to go.
  • An E-Rank technique definitely wouldn't have the ability to buff Reflexes/Coordination. Like Dawn, I would also recommend bumping it up to C-Rank.
I almost forgot the boost to C rank. Removed the Fog and Silent Killing, which mist shinobi are known for. Thanks.
Quote:
Yi Zhi Jingang Fa ~ Diamond Palm

I still find this a bit too OP. Constitution stat really has no business being buffed by this, considering it (from my understanding) is set out to be an offensive technique. Offensive techniques probably shouldn't boost Con like that.
Diamonds are known for thier hardness, in which I implied primarily for the sake of the technique of fortifying. The movement of course, yet the hardness which makes them sturdy. And its supplimentation, not offensive. With a minor boost of constitution for the sake of the diamond embrace.

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Strength: Poor
[w/ Major Disadvantage; Flaw]
Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
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 Post subject: For the Kazahana Legacy
PostPosted: Thu Apr 19, 2018 9:26 pm 
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Name: Icylyn | 氷 | Hio
Rank: E
Range: Close - Orbic [0m - 6km]
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai
Handsigns: Serpent | Mi
Lore/Flavor: During the autumn, the Kazahana subtly manipulated the weather, shifting the wet Oasis temperate rains from the sea around Kirigakure into a moist tundra for preparation of the Icylyn Solstice. Of course, this also prevented the attacks by Raiders or Vikings whom coerce akin sea, by freezing thier ships in the middle of the ocean, or creating stallagmites out of the lakes to destroy vessals. Other than, this technique could create sea blockades with the help of the kekkei genkai of the Kazahana.
Description:
This give the Kazahana caster the ability to augment aqua into snow into ice. This also gifts the Hyouton caster the ability to augment ice into snow into aqua therefore the alteration of the quintesseince for Aquatics. Also this causes the chrystallization of ice techniques to be resistance to fire.
Drawbacks: ~

Name: Arctic Haze | 氷 鍼 | Hio Moyamiki
Rank: C
Range: Personal - Medium [0m - 36m]
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai
Handsigns: Serpent | Mi
Lore/Flavor: The Kazahana are known as the 'Aetherics of the Snow' for thier prowness with the shifting the tide of a heated battle towards the glacial winds of the winter's yin. Even the young adepts are undertaken as silent whirlwinds, for thier stealthy ability to trek across the tundra with an icy incue.
Description:
After channelling chakra through out thier body, the Kazahana will begin emitting a white icy haze from thier pores, rapidly panning and covering the field, while obscuring vision. The haze is filled with miniscule ice shards, causing a major disadvantage to Reflexes and minor disadvantage to Coordination, irritation to the eyes, skin and respiratory system of those caught within the gelid fog. This technique augments suiton and mist elemental techniques into its blizzard advancement. Alternatively, The Arctic Hase technique can also be utilized to combust any suiton or hyouton technique, i.e. waterbullet/snowball, into the Arctic Haze Technique.
Drawbacks: Fire based jutsu can melt the snow of the haze, causing jutsu to revert into mist and dense humidity.

Name: Artic Gale | 氷 鍼 | Hio Khariözei
Rank: C
Range: Close - Medium [3m - 36m]
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai
Handsigns: Serpent | Mi
Lore/Flavor: The Kazahana are known as the 'Aetherics of the Snow' for thier prowness with the shifting the tide of a genkai battle towards the sweeping glacial winds of the winter's yin. Even the young adepts are underglacient as silent whirlwinds, for thier stealthy ability to trek across the tundra with an gelid aescue in celerity.
Description:
After slight gathering of chakra and the utilization of the nature combination of suiton and fuuton, the caster streams forth the energy from thier throat, hands or feet, outwards into a gust of wind, blowing forth a six meter gale of sleet, snow, and hail. Opponents hit by the gelid gale are knocked backwards 10 meters with minor disadvantage of constitution, reflexes and coordination for 2 turns.

Alternatively, this jutsu can be utilized within the range of the caster, allowing them to sweep the field with the Arctic Gale around the maximum orbit of the technique.
Drawbacks: Fire based jutsu can melt the snow of the haze, causing jutsu to revert into mist and dense humidity.


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Strength: Poor
[w/ Major Disadvantage; Flaw]
Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
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PostPosted: Thu Apr 19, 2018 9:42 pm 
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Tip. Try to avoid creating new customs till your current ones are done. Your jutsu thread is all over the place and hard to follow. It slows down your custom approval immensely.

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Attributes:

Strength: Average
Constitution: Average
Stamina: Masterful
Coordination: Average Minor
Reflexes: Proficient
Wisdom: Proficient

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Emotions of the Winter Sea | 海 初雪 情 | Bankan Koukai Hatsyuki
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 3m]
Type: Kekkei Genkai
Sub-type: Defensive, Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Clan; Hozuki Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: Known as a purification technique of the Ancients for the Hozuki Clan. The Emotions of the Sea bestows a flushing of the Hozuki's body, keeping them crisp, fresh and alkaline.
Description: Whenever the Hozuki cast a technique, they will flush with a three meter puddle underneath thier feet, letting out a small wave of water, knocking back all whom are in the vicinity, bathing the field in torrential aqua.
Drawbacks:Those whom Constitution is at least Profecient are resistant to the wave of this technique. Other than, those whom are knockbacked back are pushed ten meters.

Ambiance of the Ocean | 海洋雰囲気 | Khaiyuo O'Shien
Rank: E
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki were known to be passifist in most countries for thier massive manuevering of the tides of the seas. They are known for turning back tides of the waves and halting tsunamis, saving countries from destructions of the floods. Other than, while within thier natural element, they become powerhouses of the Suiton and Hyouton source.
Description: While the Hozuki are upon or within a pool of water, mist, rain, snow, or sleet, Suiton jutsu recieves a rank increase with a 50 percent reduction of chakra consumption.
Drawbacks: ~

Artic Archetype | 北極圏 元型 | Byakuya Chikiku
Rank: E
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Bloodline
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: A feat of the Kazahana Kekkei Genkai. The Kazahana are known to be entities of the ice, snow, sleet, rain, and mist, thus they have evolved in such geographical terrains where they have an innate advantage. Such fearsome prowness in such terrain has gifted a reknown of 'Those of the Icylyn' or 'Flakes of the Blizzard', or the 'Aetherics of the Snow'
Description: Those of the Artic Archetype naturally are intergrated with the extreme cold temperatures of the tundra and artic terrains, therefore thier bodily physiology holds immunity to the cold they emit and the weather which is akin. The Kazahana naturally recieve a Major advantage to Reflexes and a Minor Advantage to coordination, when they are celerically gracing upon icy and wet terrains. Thier wristerns and hands, otherwise, thier thighs, calves, knees, anhklettes and feet, sheen a solid white color, applicable to the snow of which they travel upon.
Drawbacks: ~

Yi Zhi Jingang Fa | 指金刚法 | One Method ~ Diamond Palm
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Taijutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor:Before artisans and healers for the daimyous, they were gatekeepers of the diamond caves, within the rough of the tundra. In those caves, it was foretold that the Kazahana learned the secrets of the crystals, emanating it's hardness and sheen, to reflect that of thier snow and ice techniques.
Description:

The method of "Diamond Palm" is a hard exercise that strengthens the external components. It belongs to the hard force of Yang. When the exercise attains its aim, it is possible to knock a hole in the chest with few fingers and injure the internal organs. However the "Diamond Palm" evolves the whole hand, both hands and feet, for proper utilization. Evolutionarily for the Kazahana, Chï saught, this technique thus mastering this exercise. Other objects may be used as well. If one strikes at a solid object, it's will leave an indention. A strike against wood would hollow it out: Against iceblocks akin stone are broken into pieces. The Kazahana's hands and feet are extremely resilient, even with a soft texture, the coutours of thier fingers, palms, hands, and wristerns are hard akin sheets of metal. Hyouton chakra can be utilized to cloak thier hands or feet further into fortification so they are sheening a luminous, yet translucent seafoam cerulean and lilac. This special coating streams a trail of glacial mist when the technique is protecting the seams of the hand, forearm or foot, calf. Naturally this hardens gifts a Minor Advantage in reflex, coordination and constitution, for attacking or parrying attacks.

Drawbacks: ~

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Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
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Strength: Poor
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Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
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Strength: Poor
[w/ Major Disadvantage; Flaw]
Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
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[w/ Major Advantage; Ijutsu Specialty]
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Emotions of the Winter Sea | 海 初雪 情 | Bankan Koukai Hatsyuki
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 3m]
Type: Kekkei Genkai
Sub-type: Defensive, Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Clan; Hozuki Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: Known as a purification technique of the Ancients for the Hozuki Clan. The Emotions of the Sea bestows a flushing of the Hozuki's body, keeping them crisp, fresh and alkaline.
Description: Whenever the Hozuki cast a technique, they will flush with a three meter puddle underneath thier feet, letting out a small wave of water, knocking back all whom are in the vicinity, bathing the field in torrential aqua.
Drawbacks:Those whom Constitution is at least Profecient are resistant to the wave of this technique. Other than, those whom are knockbacked back are pushed ten meters.
I still don't see this working fairly.
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Ambiance of the Ocean | 海洋雰囲気 | Khaiyuo O'Shien
Rank: E
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki were known to be passifist in most countries for thier massive manuevering of the tides of the seas. They are known for turning back tides of the waves and halting tsunamis, saving countries from destructions of the floods. Other than, while within thier natural element, they become powerhouses of the Suiton and Hyouton source.
Description: While the Hozuki are upon or within a pool of water, mist, rain, snow, or sleet, Suiton jutsu recieves a rank increase with a 50 percent reduction of chakra consumption.
Drawbacks: ~
Sure. Approved unless someone else has anything to add.
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Yi Zhi Jingang Fa | 指金刚法 | One Method ~ Diamond Palm
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Taijutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor:Before artisans and healers for the daimyous, they were gatekeepers of the diamond caves, within the rough of the tundra. In those caves, it was foretold that the Kazahana learned the secrets of the crystals, emanating it's hardness and sheen, to reflect that of thier snow and ice techniques.
Description:

The method of "Diamond Palm" is a hard exercise that strengthens the external components. It belongs to the hard force of Yang. When the exercise attains its aim, it is possible to knock a hole in the chest with few fingers and injure the internal organs. However the "Diamond Palm" evolves the whole hand, both hands and feet, for proper utilization. Evolutionarily for the Kazahana, Chï saught, this technique thus mastering this exercise. Other objects may be used as well. If one strikes at a solid object, it's will leave an indention. A strike against wood would hollow it out: Against iceblocks akin stone are broken into pieces. The Kazahana's hands and feet are extremely resilient, even with a soft texture, the coutours of thier fingers, palms, hands, and wristerns are hard akin sheets of metal. Hyouton chakra can be utilized to cloak thier hands or feet further into fortification so they are sheening a luminous, yet translucent seafoam cerulean and lilac. This special coating streams a trail of glacial mist when the technique is protecting the seams of the hand, forearm or foot, calf. Naturally this hardens gifts a Minor Advantage in reflex, coordination and constitution, for attacking or parrying attacks.

Drawbacks: ~
I just don't see this working. You can either have:
  • An offensive tech that knocks holes in someone's chest for a much higher rank and gets no stat buffs
or
  • A defensive tech that coats the hands/feet in diamond-hard chakra for the same rank and a Minor Advantage to Constitution and Strength, but doesn't punch holes in chests.
You can't have both. You can split this into two techniques, but you can't have one tech that does it all.
You have your options. Denied until you choose.
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Fighting Styles:
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Stats:
  • Strength: Masterful (Major Advantage, Ken Spec)
  • Constitution: Average
  • Stamina: Proficient
  • Reflexes: Average (Major Advantage, Ken Spec)
  • Coordination: Proficient (Major Advantage, Ken Spec)
  • Wisdom: Average
  • Tracking: Epic (Major Advantage, Ken Spec)
Elements:
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Ambiance of the Ocean | 海洋雰囲気 | Khaiyuo O'Shien
Rank: E
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki were known to be passifist in most countries for thier massive manuevering of the tides of the seas. They are known for turning back tides of the waves and halting tsunamis, saving countries from destructions of the floods. Other than, while within thier natural element, they become powerhouses of the Suiton and Hyouton source.
Description: While the Hozuki are upon or within a pool of water, mist, rain, snow, or sleet, Suiton jutsu recieves a rank increase with a 50 percent reduction of chakra consumption.
Drawbacks: ~

Sure. Approved unless someone else has anything to add.
This is absolutely denied. A technique of no cost that's basically Nin Spec but better in every case other than A-Ranks with no drawbacks. Flat denied.

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Emotions of the Winter Sea | 海 初雪 情 | Bankan Koukai Hatsyuki
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 3m]
Type: Bloodline
Sub-type: Defensive, Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Hozuki Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: Known as a purification technique of the Ancients for the Hozuki Clan. The Emotions of the Sea bestows a flushing of the Hozuki's body, keeping them crisp, fresh and alkaline.
Description: Whenever the Hozuki cast a Suiton technique, they will flush with a three meter puddle underneath thier feet, letting out a small wave of water, knocking back all whom are in the vicinity, bathing the field in torrential aqua.
Drawbacks:Those whom Constitution is at least Profecient are resistant to the wave of this technique. Other than, those whom are knockbacked back are pushed ten meters.
I thought I altered the jutsu so it was atleast fair. So I'll change again and see how it goes. For Suiton jutsu, rather than just any techniques, which needs it down to one specialty?
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Ambiance of the Ocean | 海洋雰囲気 | Khaiyuo O'Shien
Rank: B
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Bloodline
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Hozuki Exclusive; Ninjutsu Major
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki were known to be passifist in most countries for thier massive manuevering of the tides of the seas. They are known for turning back tides of the waves and halting tsunamis, saving countries from destructions of the floods. Other than, while within thier natural element, they become powerhouses of the Suiton source.
Description: While the Hozuki are upon or within a pool of water, mist, rain, snow, or sleet, they receive a Major Advantage to Stamina and Constitution. Suiton recieves a rank increase within such terrain and replishes stamina by 5 each turn.
Drawbacks: ~
It's kinda what the Hozuki do if they are in a basin of water. Or like in pokemon with raindance? Even so, do you feel it would be better as a personal SA, rather than a technique for the whole clan, cause Hozuki have water physiology, and that kinda increases stamina also, based on anime and other known causations. Other than, I bumped the rank to C and required the Hozuki to be at least a Ninjutsu Major. Unless you saying it requires to be A rank for approval, which I guess I can also do.
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Artic Archetype | 北極圏 元型 | Byakuya Chikiku
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Bloodline
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: A feat of the Kazahana Kekkei Genkai. The Kazahana are known to be entities of the ice, snow, sleet, rain, and mist, thus they have evolved in such geographical terrains where they have an innate advantage. Such fearsome prowness in such terrain has gifted a reknown of 'Those of the Icylyn' or 'Flakes of the Blizzard', or the 'Aetherics of the Snow'
Description: Those of the Artic Archetype naturally are intergrated with the extreme cold temperatures of the tundra and artic terrains, therefore thier bodily physiology holds immunity to the cold they emit and the weather which is akin. The Kazahana naturally recieve a Major advantage to Reflexes and a Minor Advantage to coordination, when they are celerically gracing upon icy and wet terrains. Thier wristerns and hands, otherwise, thier thighs, calves, knees, anhklettes and feet, sheen a solid white color, applicable to the snow of which they travel upon.
Drawbacks: ~
Not sure if this was approved, so I'll repost again.
Quote:
Yi Zhi Jingang Fa | 指金刚法 | One Method ~ Diamond Palm
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Taijutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor:Before artisans and healers for the daimyous, they were gatekeepers of the diamond caves, within the rough of the tundra. In those caves, it was foretold that the Kazahana learned the secrets of the crystals, emanating it's hardness and sheen, to reflect that of thier snow and ice techniques.
Description:

The method of "Diamond Palm" is a hard exercise that strengthens the external components. It belongs to the hard force of Yang. When the exercise attains its aim, it is possible to injure the internal organs of the opponent. However the "Diamond Palm" evolves the whole hand, both hands and feet, for proper utilization. Evolutionarily for the Kazahana, Chï saught, this technique thus mastering this exercise. Other objects may be used as well. If one strikes at a solid object, it's will leave an indention. A strike against wood would hollow it out: Against iceblocks akin stone are broken into pieces. The Kazahana's hands and feet are extremely resilient, even with a soft texture, the coutours of thier fingers, palms, hands, and wristerns are hard akin sheets of metal. Hyouton chakra can be utilized to cloak thier hands or feet further into fortification so they are sheening a luminous, yet translucent seafoam cerulean and lilac. This special coating streams a trail of glacial mist when the technique is protecting the seams of the hand, forearm or foot, calf. Naturally the coating hardens gifting a Minor Advantage in reflex, strength, and constitution, for attacking or parrying attacks.

Drawbacks: ~
I removed the portion of being able to dmg the physicality of others, and switched coordination for strength? I chose the only option.

I appreciate the checks though. If there is anything else, let me know. ^__^

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[w/ Major Disadvantage; Flaw]
Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
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Strength: Poor
[w/ Major Disadvantage; Flaw]
Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
[w/ Minor Advantage; Ninjutsu Major]
[w/ Major Advantage; Ijutsu Specialty]
Wisdom: Average
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PostPosted: Wed May 02, 2018 2:21 pm 
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Hi sorry for the long wait, I'll take over from here on out.

We'll start with your recently altered techniques and work from there on out!

Emotions of the Winter Sea

Change the constitution requirement into strength and this technique looks fine.

Ambiance of the Ocean


You can't really add personal sa's unless you receive a rank up from your kage, meet the optional requirements to rank up or do something very special ic that warrants the gain of a specific sa. I wouldn't recommend going that route since this technique is packed with benefits that would probably not get approved. Instead, I'd suggest removing the major advantage to stamina since we generally do not allow such things anymore with our revamped system. I'm not entirely sure why you should be more resistant to damage intake either. Could you justify this?

The requirement of ninjutsu major isn't needed and I find that the technique isn't complex enough to warrant such a requirement either. In general passive abilities are frowned upon and I'm not sure how you'd interact the payment of a B rank to then regain 5 stamina points every following turn whilst increasing the rank of your water techniques by one. In all honesty, this technique packs too much in its kit and does several different things right now. I don't see it anywhere near approvable and besides my initial suggestion I'd recommend just scrapping the entire idea or reworking it completely.
Quote:
Artic Archetype | 北極圏 元型 | Byakuya Chikiku
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Bloodline
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: A feat of the Kazahana Kekkei Genkai. The Kazahana are known to be entities of the ice, snow, sleet, rain, and mist, thus they have evolved in such geographical terrains where they have an innate advantage. Such fearsome prowness in such terrain has gifted a reknown of 'Those of the Icylyn' or 'Flakes of the Blizzard', or the 'Aetherics of the Snow'
Description: Those of the Artic Archetype naturally are intergrated with the extreme cold temperatures of the tundra and artic terrains, therefore thier bodily physiology holds immunity to the cold they emit and the weather which is akin. The Kazahana naturally recieve a Major advantage to Reflexes and a Minor Advantage to coordination, when they are celerically gracing upon icy and wet terrains. Thier wristerns and hands, otherwise, thier thighs, calves, knees, anhklettes and feet, sheen a solid white color, applicable to the snow of which they travel upon.
Drawbacks: ~
Approved.
Quote:
Yi Zhi Jingang Fa | 指金刚法 | One Method ~ Diamond Palm
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Taijutsu
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Blizzard; Hyouton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Kazahana Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor:Before artisans and healers for the daimyous, they were gatekeepers of the diamond caves, within the rough of the tundra. In those caves, it was foretold that the Kazahana learned the secrets of the crystals, emanating it's hardness and sheen, to reflect that of thier snow and ice techniques.
Description:

The method of "Diamond Palm" is a hard exercise that strengthens the external components. It belongs to the hard force of Yang. When the exercise attains its aim, it is possible to injure the internal organs of the opponent. However the "Diamond Palm" evolves the whole hand, both hands and feet, for proper utilization. Evolutionarily for the Kazahana, Chï saught, this technique thus mastering this exercise. Other objects may be used as well. If one strikes at a solid object, it's will leave an indention. A strike against wood would hollow it out: Against iceblocks akin stone are broken into pieces. The Kazahana's hands and feet are extremely resilient, even with a soft texture, the coutours of thier fingers, palms, hands, and wristerns are hard akin sheets of metal. Hyouton chakra can be utilized to cloak thier hands or feet further into fortification so they are sheening a luminous, yet translucent seafoam cerulean and lilac. This special coating streams a trail of glacial mist when the technique is protecting the seams of the hand, forearm or foot, calf. Naturally the coating hardens gifting a Minor Advantage in reflex, strength, and constitution, for attacking or parrying attacks.

Drawbacks: ~
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Emotions of the Winter Sea | 海 初雪 情 | Bankan Koukai Hatsyuki
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 3m]
Type: Bloodline
Sub-type: Defensive, Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Hozuki Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: Known as a purification technique of the Ancients for the Hozuki Clan. The Emotions of the Sea bestows a flushing of the Hozuki's body, keeping them crisp, fresh and alkaline.
Description: Whenever the Hozuki cast a Suiton technique, they will flush with a three meter puddle underneath thier feet, letting out a small wave of water, knocking back all whom are in the vicinity, bathing the field in torrential aqua.
Drawbacks:Those whom Strength is at least Profecient are resistant to the wave of this technique. Other than, those whom are knockbacked back are pushed ten meters.
Altered.
Quote:
Ambiance of the Ocean | 海洋雰囲気 | Khaiyuo O'Shien
Rank: B
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Bloodline
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Hozuki Exclusive;
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki were known to be passifist in most countries for thier massive manuevering of the tides of the seas. They are known for turning back tides of the waves and halting tsunamis, saving countries from destructions of the floods. Other than, while within thier natural element, they become powerhouses of the Suiton source.
Description: While the Hozuki are upon or within a pool of water, mist, rain, snow, or sleet, they receive a Major Advantage to Constitution. Suiton recieves a rank increase within such terrain.
Drawbacks: ~
From observation, the Hozuki utilizes the waves of water they create for supplimental feats: stealth, amplification, and fortification. This particular jutsu increases fortification, thus Stamina and Constitution. However, since the patch, just constitution and possibly coordination for the 'flow of the waves in the sea'. I decreased the fluff of the jutsu for two major abilities, which I can split into two different techniques. However require help with the jutsu rank
Quote:
Ambiance of the Ocean | 海洋雰囲気 | Khaiyuo O'Shien
Rank: B
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Bloodline
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Hozuki Exclusive;
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki were known to be passifist in most countries for thier massive manuevering of the tides of the seas. They are known for turning back tides of the waves and halting tsunamis, saving countries from destructions of the floods. Other than, while within thier natural element, they become powerhouses of the Suiton source.
Description: Suiton recieves a rank increase when the Hozuki within a pool of water, mist, rain, snow, or sleet,
Drawbacks: ~
Quote:
Fortitude of the Ocean | 海洋雰囲気 | Gouki O'Shien
Rank: B
Range: Personal [0m - 5m]
Type: Bloodline
Sub-type: Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Hozuki Exclusive;
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: The Hozuki were known to be passifist in most countries for thier massive manuevering of the tides of the seas. They are known for turning back tides of the waves and halting tsunamis, saving countries from destructions of the floods. Other than, while within thier natural element, they become powerhouses of the Suiton source.
Description: While the Hozuki are upon or within a pool of water, mist, rain, snow, or sleet, they receive a Full Tier Advantage to Constitution.
Drawbacks: ~

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Rank:
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Role:
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Fighting Styles:
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~`|• Statistical Information •|`~
Strength: Poor
[w/ Major Disadvantage; Flaw]
Constitution: Poor
Stamina: Average
{ ~ 50SP; 30SP Ninjutsu Major; 100SP Ijutsu Specialty }
Reflex: Average
Coordination: Average
[w/ Minor Advantage; Ninjutsu Major]
[w/ Major Advantage; Ijutsu Specialty]
Wisdom: Average
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Emotions of the Winter Sea | 海 初雪 情 | Bankan Koukai Hatsyuki
Rank: C
Range: Personal [0m - 3m]
Type: Bloodline
Sub-type: Defensive, Supplementary, Passive
Elemental Affinity: Release of Aqua; Suiton
Notation: Kekkei Genkai; Hozuki Exclusive
Handsigns: -
Lore/Flavor: Known as a purification technique of the Ancients for the Hozuki Clan. The Emotions of the Sea bestows a flushing of the Hozuki's body, keeping them crisp, fresh and alkaline.
Description: Whenever the Hozuki cast a Suiton technique, they will flush with a three meter puddle underneath thier feet, letting out a small wave of water, knocking back all whom are in the vicinity, bathing the field in torrential aqua.
Drawbacks:Those whom Strength is at least Profecient are resistant to the wave of this technique. Other than, those whom are knockbacked back are pushed ten meters.
One more thing just so that this 'passive' ability is clear. It costs an additional C rank chakra to utilize this on top of whatever other technique you use to trigger this jutsu. Add that in please.


Ambiance of the Ocean

Add a note that you must actually pay a B rank cost on top of whatever technique you choose to utilize to boost their power. In addition, it cannot stack on top of other technique boost bonuses and cannot exceed S rank power, of course.

Fortitude of the Ocean

As previously mentioned, add a clarification that this passive effect actually costs the amount of chakra equal to its rank.

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Attributes:

Strength: Average
Constitution: Average
Stamina: Masterful
Coordination: Average Minor
Reflexes: Proficient
Wisdom: Proficient

Fighting Styles:

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Elements:
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Spent Character Points: 5000
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